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아규 116번 첨삭 부탁드립니다!

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■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. You response will be judge on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.
■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading


▶ Topic :116. The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a food distribution company with food storage warehouses in several cities.

"Recently, we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest Control Company, which we have used for many years in Palm City, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. This difference in pest damage is best explained by the negligence of Fly-Away."

Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.


▶ Your Answer :

In the memo, the vice president of a food distribution company states that the ways to eradicate pests of Fly-Away Past Control Company is not effective and waste of money. Although this argument may seem convincing at first, the lack of alternative explanations leads me to question the validity of conclusions.

First, the author should take into account of alternative explanations for the intrinsic qualities of between Palm city’s and Wintervale’s warehouse. However, if Wintervale is located in the town where there might be less pests than the countryside that the Palm’s warehouse is located, the author cannot refer to the amount of damaged loss as the company’s ability of eliminating pests. Moreover, it is likely that there might be other factors that can have adverse impact on food such as temperature, humidity and pollutants.

Second, the author need to take into consideration of alternatives for last month damage of food in warehouse. The author solely focuses on the amount of damaged food. However, the first conditions about the number of pests of each city may be considered, then the evaluation of the Fly-Away’s performance have to be updated. That is, if the number of pests in the pests are significant and this company kill a plethora of pests, then $20,000 worth of food which was damaged might be negligible. Moreover, since the amount of loss during last month can be an aberration, the author should view this in the long run.

Lastly, alternatives for the conclusion that the difference of the money of damaged food caused by each company shows the negligence of Fly-Away should be considered. Since pests can become strains if they are exposed to the pesticides for a long time, the author cannot take at face value the present difference in pest as the skill of each company.

           In summary, the author’s argument is unsound on many grounds. To bolster the argument, the author should consider more alternatives for the intrinsic conditions of Palm city and Wintervale, the initial number of pests in each city and soundness of conclusions.

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