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Argue 53번 평가 부탁드립니다.

Argue 53 | 조회 473 | 추천 10
  • 2016.10.14
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■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. You response will be judge on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.
■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading


▶ Topic :46. The following appeared in a health magazine published in Corpora.
Medical experts say that only one-quarter of Corpora's citizens meet the current standards for adequate physical fitness, even though twenty years ago, one-half of all of Corpora's citizens met the standards as then defined. But these experts are mistaken when they suggest that spending too much time using computers has caused a decline in fitness. Since overall fitness levels are highest in regions of Corpora where levels of computer ownership are also highest, it is clear that using computers has not made citizens less physically fit. Instead, as shown by this year's unusually low expenditures on fitness-related products and services, the recent
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decline in the economy is most likely the cause, and fitness levels will improve when the economy does.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
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▶ Your Answer :

It might be axiomatic that the level of physical fitness in Corpora is decreased  in these time. To support this claim, the author points out that the reason for the weakness is because of not  the usage of computer but the decrease of economy.  However, this argument is not cogent in several respects.

First. The author assumes that the comparison of survey based on the fact that the survey is comparable equally. Nonetheless, the author fails to substantiate this assumption. If we have evident that the population composition of Corpora’s had changed during the twenty years, or that the criteria’s rigorous of the survey had changed, the evident would certainly weaken the argument.

Next, the author depends on the supposition that the computer cannot be the reason for the decline in fitness by citing that the level of the fitness is parallel with the level of fitness. Nevertheless, there is no evidence for this assumption. It is entirely possible that the people who owns the computer used it few time, and they chose to spend the time for exercising instead using computer.  If so, the conclusion is not convincing.

Last, the author assumes that consumption of the products related with fitness cause to increase the fitness level by pointing out recent declining in the economy. However, it is doubt that when the economy would be revitalized, the people want to buy the fitness related product. They prefer the more economic fitness, for example walking in the park or doing yoga in the home, instead spending money. Moreover, although they purchase the fitness related products, it cannot be mean that they will exercise with the product.

In sum, the argument is gratuitous as it stands. To bolster the argument, the author must provide clear evidence that the population composition and criteria of the survey and that how many hours they use computer in the region of   Corpora. Also, to better assess the argument, I would need more information about the relationship between the economy development and the purchasing of the athletic merchandises, and the ratio of exercise using  the athletic merchandises.

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