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이슈 첨삭 부탁드립니다!!

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  • 2016.06.02
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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words.
■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer

▶ Topic :

1. As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

▶ Your Answer :

           In our society, it is debatable whether the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate as people are more dependent on technology to solve issues. Although the statement may seem convincing, I do not agree in that the technology takes a toll on humans' ability to think for themselves.

           Admittedly, advance of the technology can have a harmful effect on humans by depriving of the opportunities for human to think for themselves because it can take their jobs. In a recent Go competition between Sedol Lee, a representative of Go player among humans, and the AlphaGo, a computer program created by Google DeepMind, people adamantly expected that the human will surely defeat AlphaGo. However, it turned out that AlphaGo actually has a superior ability to play Go than human beings. Many people were shocked to watch the game, and they soon have feared that the technology would not only take their jobs but also deteriorate ability to think for themselves. If the technology takes most of human jobs that have traditionally required human's intelligence, the human no longer needs to think for themselves but just do what the technology orders.

           However, it is also required to look at the positive aspect that the technology has provided to us. Thanks to the technology development, people have nurtured their imaginations. Until Wright Brothers invented an airplane with strong engine and propellers, no one believed that human could fly. When they realized that the technology can enable their dreams come true, people made a huge progress in our society by actively utilizing it. A few hundred years later after the invention, people developed spaceship and Neil Armstrong walked on the moon for the first time. Had not been for the developed technology, people would not have dreamed they could explore the universe later on. In this sense, technology does not deteriorate the ability of humans to think for themselves but triggered humans to imagine and dream big.

           In summary, although many worries that it could take a toll on people by depriving of their jobs, the technology has improved the society by triggering humans to be more imaginative than ever. Thus, we have to go the extra mile to take advantages of technology to develop the ability to think for ourselves.


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