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■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. You response will be judge on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.
■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading

▶ Topic :

People's attitudes are determined more by their immediate situation or surroundings than by society as a whole.

▶ Your Answer :

Social environments are important factors in deciding people’s attitudes. It is widely regarded that a nation’s various trends tend to form people’s behaviors. However, it is true that personal surroundings is also essential element in people’s attitudes.


Admittedly, it seems axiomatic that a society has a great impact on people’s behaviors. It is widely known that all nations have accumulated different cultures and traditions, which effects people’s behavior patterns and ways of thinking. According to the Programme for International Student Assesment (PISA) 2012 report, there was a big difference between Asian students and European students. While European students tend to make a decision for themselves, and attend schools voluntarily, Asian students are likely to study in order to satisfy their parents. As a result, European students feel happy at schools, and enjoy a higher quality of living, but Asian students suffer from psychological pressure at schools despite a higher academic achievement than European students. This result evidently shows that people have different attitudes according to the society they belong to.


However, in some instances, personal situations, emotion and belief have a greater relation to people’s attitude. Regardless of which societies they belong to, financial status, religions, or personal faith play a significant role in people’s stances. For example, “Trends in International Mathematics and Science study (TIMSS) 2011” report revealed that parents’ financial abilities are highly related to their children’s academic achievements. They shared the case that if parents suffer from unemployment or personal bankruptcy, their children are likely to have a hard time focusing on studies. This phenomenon stays the same in all nations, which means that personal issues are regarded as more influential than social issues in people’s attitudes.


All in all, both personal surroundings and societies have a great impact on people’s attitudes. In some cases, a society’s cultural and habitual characters are influential in forming people’s behavior patters, but private faith or financial conditions are also highly related to them. 

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